Sunday, August 7, 2011

Is life a sonic painting?

I like a lot of the language here. It could use a little editing. I would get rid of "per chance" and just say, "What if life is only a sonic painting?" I really like the sound of "humbled," "mumbled," "accents," "ascending," and later on the word "stumbling," "numbing." A lot, and I mean a LOT of potential here.

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